AQ: If you refer to the author’s point X, do not ignore X and talk about Y in your Ex/Ev

31 07 2011

In the 2010 ‘A’ Level paper, Patricia O’Sullivan made several observations pertaining to food. One was that there is a rising obesity problem because of an increase in fast-food consumption. Another is that our culinary diversity is diminishing.

If you start your paragraph by referring to the point on obesity (only), it makes absolutely no sense to tell me, in the same paragraph, that thanks to hawker centres and our love for local fare, our culinary diversity is not diminishing.

Coherence matters.




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